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Creation (June Contest)

E=Mc2.
Had he not found it someone else would.
But… the Pastoral, Emperor, Sonata seventeen.
Had he not lived, they would not.
They would never have been.
What would Mendelssohn have done then?
Schumann, Schubert, the list goes on.
How vacant would our lives be?
We would sing no Ode to Joy.

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Free verse
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Last few words: 
Due to the "bugs", this is not officially listed as part of the June Contest. Nevertheless, I post it here as Stan instructed me to. This is my entry.
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but I could live quite happily without that famous quotation. As a classical music lover, I prefer the Ode to Joy over a handful of molecules and whatever E=Mc2 stands for--which I happen to know, lol. Thanks, Wesley.
Ali

But how did you like my first go at "free verse"? It was hard for me. I desperately needed to rhyme.

W. H. Snow

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Free verse can be tough if you try to do more than just chop up prose can't it ? lol. I think I know who you reference but will keep my mouth shut. Appreciate the entry. BTW the bug now seems to be fixed......stan

This is actually an interesting idea...that all discovery of science is inevitable, and is only a matter of who got there first..whereas the creative force is unique, never to be replicated. This could be because science is a collection of provable theories or laws and art isn't...very interesting. Not sure i ever heard anyone consider it just that way..
Does have a little basis in Blake. Newton was a key character in the Blake universe of characters, chastised because he put limits on the human imagination by Urizen, in conflict with Albion.
The poem might be a little too long, allow me...

E=Mc2. (title)

Had Albert not found it , someone else would.
But the Pastoral, Emperor, the Moonlight Sonata
Had Ludwig not lived, they would not.
What would Franz and Felix have done?
For us no Ode to Joy to be sung!

Hope you don't mind me taking the liberty..
.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

But that's not very free verse like. I also did not want to use his name. That was quite deliberate.

W. H. Snow

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That was the intent

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

purposeless ramblings (such as certain keyboard jockeys on this site engage in) a free verse does not make. We all know, free verse has no rhythmic drumbeat. Anything and everything can be the topic of a free verse poem. The poem can tell a story, describe a person, animal, feeling or object. It can be serious, sad, funny or educational. The reason your write caught my eye was that it is interesting, at least to me. Personally, I might avoid short sentences followed by the weighty period. Much more could be said on this subject, but I have yet to find total agreement on what free-verse is--or isn't. Therefore, I follow my own intuition and write while keeping in mind that free verse isn't entirely without rules. Here is one of my free-verses on a theme that's on similar notes as your own:
Sure, I could have chopped up the lines, but I preferred not to. Yes,you have a free-verse, sir. Ali

Thoughts on Divine Music

Listen to the ocean waves!
How they create their aquatic symphony;
one might suspect that great Brahms
was the copyist who captured
the lilting allegro non troppo motion
of rhythmic, splashing waves,
then to rhapsodize on crashing swells.

But woe when awesome
Beethoven whips calm waters
into towering waves and churns them
into storm seas.
Only a deaf composer can so express
the forces of nature through music.

Mozart, you beloved of God—
what can one say? Not enough,
you master of ethereal melodies,
giver of pleasurable music.

Now about that old bore-- Bach--
His music makes Heaven rejoice
while Satan weeps tears of remorse
for his misdeeds against man and God.

that Beethoven never "heard" his ninth symphony save in his head? I like your poem.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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yes, once there lived musical giants on this earth . . . . Ali

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