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COWS AND BUTTERCUPS edit

Submitted by Geremia on Tue, 2016-05-17 08:56

COWS AND BUTTERCUPS
WEST VIRGINIA 1944

across a field velvet green,
with buttercups and roaming cows
framed in skies cerulean
two women, skirts past the knees.
white hair dancing in the breeze,
walked lazily arm in arm in quiet conversation.
rare moments these to tell what only women
need to share beyond the care of men

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jane210660

Tue, 2016-05-17 09:27

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I can see it perfectly. Jx

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Geremia

Tue, 2016-05-17 09:29

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And I remember it. Thank you, Jane......'

joe

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brittle light

Tue, 2016-05-17 10:41

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a vivid scene that elicits a saga...in so few words

remarkable!

Al

Geremia

Tue, 2016-05-17 10:52

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there is still poetry in me as the light grows ever dim.

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lovedly

Thu, 2016-05-19 04:32

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it's all poetry
only in you
u r wonderful

'''.....two women, skirts past the knees.
white hair dancing in the breeze,....

and
I saw two such women
kiss each other
as if the heavens thundered..
real smoooochh
what can men doooooooooooo
they only woooooo

Geremia

Thu, 2016-05-19 08:15

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always an encouraging word. Now if positive thinking could raise my dopamine level. Meds stopped working. Thanx

joe

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Keith Logan

Thu, 2016-05-19 02:35

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this beautiful vignette. It's not easy to say much in so few words especially when they are as unpretentious as this.

Keith Logan
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Geremia

Thu, 2016-05-19 08:20

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I am so glad this poem was read as all who commented understood it. Thank you, Keith,

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