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Cowgirls...

Contented cows chewing cud
They watched as Hank walked by
Leaning on the fence, slinging mud
They stared with big brown eyes

Oh, have a look at those hands
Strong but gentle now
He's the best in these here lands
He sure does know just how

I was full to bursting yesterday
He relieved me well
His hands are gentle, I must say
He made me feel so swell

He warms his fingers before he starts
Not like farmer Brown
Whose hands are cold as his heart
I hate when he sits down

Daisy and Bess, were sore last week
Hank soothed them mighty quick
I hear that Bess licked his cheek
And Daisy gave Bess a kick

Jealous sisters are them two
Said Sarah as she giggled
Daisy said she was about to moo
And Sarah gave a little wiggle

Hank's ears were burning as he walked
He knew they spoke of things
He knew that they often talked
And his heart took wings

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Structured: Western
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This is for my cowgirls! Hope this satisfies.
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as Obadiah says; "I don't think there's anyone don't like cows." These girls are something special alright! Glad to serve, as Hank says.~ Geez.
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Hi, Geezer,
Big grin, here! I knew your title would have a twist to it! Love these gals! Perfect! Excellent rhyme and rhythm, and your ending is so, so sweet. (Is Hank married?) Really enjoyed this!
Thank you!
L

no, Hank isn't married. He is divorced, says that his wife didn't like farm-life; so she split with a vacuum salesman a couple of years ago. I can introduce you if you like; as long as you don't mind sharing with his cowgirls! LoL
~ Geez.
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Luverly udders !!!
Actually, I don't know a single person who dislikes cows.

I like cows;
cows seem to like me,
maybe we ought get together sometime;
chew the cud,
talk udders--

YEAH,
that'd be good,

we could crap on daisies
in the meadow
and watch them grow-
piss in streams
add a liddle-- YELLLOOOWWW,
eat only the greenest grass
yeah,
that'd be good,

I just need to learn to mooo.,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,­,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,mooo,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,­,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,MOOOOOOOOO.

you will do fine! You have enough bull for them, or so I've herd! Glad you like my barn-yard tales. Glad you stopped by. ~Geez.
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