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Covid Karma...

Submitted by Geezer on Sat, 2020-10-03 12:48

It isn't something to worry about
Says the President
We're coming around the corner
He says with a little pout

Look at Joey Biden
A great big mask, you see?
I think that bastard's hiding
He's so scared of me

Look at me, I'm so brave
I go all bare-faced [lies]
So many lives I could have saved
Don't look me in the eyes

Holding a great big rally tonight
Dems, you stay away
The Proud Boys have come to fight
They heard what I had to say

Ooops, I came on way too strong
Ruined our debate
Shouldn't have talked so loud and long
I guess it is too late

I'm feeling kind of woozy now
Feeling a little sick
My breath is coming harder, Wow
Get to the hospital quick

So, I guess that Karma comes around
As many people say
I hope that there's some sympathy found
Come election-day

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Structured: Western
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I really hope that he doesn't die, but I wouldn't mind if he was good and sick. A full recovery to you, Mr. President!
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Editing - draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Sat, 2020-10-03 13:18

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your most generous comments. I could probably find something to tighten it up in a place or two, but I'm too tired right now. Maybe I'll come back later to look at it. I just had to get this down before I forgot what I wanted to say. I had a couple of the first lines already written in my head and wanted to make sure I didn't lose them. ~ Geez.
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scribbler

Sat, 2020-10-03 17:47

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I reckon you are already aware that I disagree with the premise of this one but I'm gonna help a bit anyway. Stanzas 1 through 7, just delete (just kidding lol). Now to serious stuff .First stanza last line try he says instead of says he.Stanza 4 line 3. try the proud boys have come here to fight. Well that's enough for now you can go back to being misguided politically lol

Geezer

Sat, 2020-10-03 21:16

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helping me out with that line. I got the line 3/ stanza 4 too. Yes, I know where you stand on the premise, but...He does make such a good subject to write about. ~ Gee.
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scribbler

Sun, 2020-10-04 23:38

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I guess we'll see if the mood strikes me

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