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Course,You Are
You are my eyes,
ears and mind,
Without your help
no words I'll find
In my mind poems emanate.
I am no poet still,to date,
I know not the nuances of poetry,
Yet it surprises me,
When many still seek me.
Am I the small bard
You make out of me,
As words flow out
Like milk and cream…
The choice of words
emanates from my supercilious mind,
Many say it’s not up to date
Albeit,
I am never too late
To accept a kick or two,
I do love to confess.
There are some master poets here,
And all love to profess
Hope the message goes home
Where ever you may be,
in London
Or in Rome.
Style / type:
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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scribbler
Thu, 2012-01-26 23:21
hello
A few ideas to discard lol:
L-3 and 4 you might try something like:
..Without your help
no words I'll find
L=5 In my mind poems emanate
L-18 in my opinion you should not call a critic by name
last 2 lines need a bit more clarity
But the poem Does deliver what I think you mean to convey............stan
loved
Thu, 2012-01-26 23:40
Aye, Aye Sir!
Thanks ....you found the time for me
to scan my inner intelligence
Stan you are
Neopoet's
Real man!
loved
author commentIan.T
Fri, 2012-01-27 03:11
Loved
Your points are noted, that your words are wasted comes to me across the unravelled work.
I will say that this is well written and as a protest sounds good, great indeed.
I would love for you to take a random subject leaving out what others think, and your views on their ways.
Let us see a poem written by Loved of something outside of this arena you are sitting in.
The show has now ended and you need to walk with life out there taking in the love of the things around you and the happenings of the world.
Let the young Bard talk of life that is not in this place of words, go hug a tree or walk within the ways of others.
There is a journey needed you can decide the destination, Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
loved
Fri, 2012-01-27 08:09
Dear Ian, you marvel me at times
Dear Ian, you marvel me at times
''Abstract Personification''
Inspired by the cut-glass, you handle...
I shall take the cue,
From all of you
So please do justice to the new babe..
loved
author commentwesley snow
Sun, 2012-01-29 13:47
One at a time.
First, I agree with Ian.
Second, "of course you are a poet". Nuances do not a poet make. They refine.
As to being up to date... You are writing in English. That language is about five hundred years old. ALL of it is fair game to the poet. When one says the poet should "write in the language of the day", as far as I'm concerned that DAY started at Chaucer and the sun has not set. wesley
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A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley
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