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The Cost Of A Smile
Clocks are not ticking in unison
still they compliment each other
echoing each others voice
The intimacy
between space and time
is no more than an afterthought
that lingers without boundaries
The vastness of a clear blue sky
reflects the outstretched sea
to hold the mirrored image therein
So what of man's emotions
aimed at his fellow man
will they mimic that space and time
Or will he shun self sacrifice
adhering to the center self
then dying all alone
How quickly we forget
what it is to want
do we not remember
what it feels like to need
wrapped tightly in our safe cocoons
While others suffer
their fated wounds
oh yes
we have forgotten
how to give
So what is the cost of a smile
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Comments
Geezer
Sat, 2020-08-01 19:02
Some very...
philosophical thoughts going on here. I like the last lines, but I would love to see a question mark at the end. ~ Geez.
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c lynn brooks
Sat, 2020-08-01 19:53
Hi Gee
thank you , you know how I feel about punctuation in free verse
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Teddy15
Sat, 2020-08-01 19:41
Dear c lynn brooks
amazingly thought provoking. it doesnt cost anything to smile for sure
we are not always in the same place of our minds, but a smile surely goes a long way to say it's ok it's ok. that's how i have read this this evening.
your talent is truly raw tonight chrys i applaud you with all my heart
geezer's question mark is also a good point, i never read comments from others but this evening i have.
it brings us to question this wonderful question. i feel the question mark will make this so much more powerful.
Thank you...Teddy
c lynn brooks
Sat, 2020-08-01 19:55
Teddy
thank you see my above comment to gee about the question mark lol
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Teddy15
Sat, 2020-08-01 20:14
dear c lynn brooks
lol you got me, fair enough. i never read other comments
as you wish my dear friend
Thank you...Teddy