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THE CONFESSIONS OF A SPIDER-updated

THE CONFESSIONS OF A SPIDER

I confess
The moment wasn’t my best
I sat down beside her
for I did lust for her curves
and waves.
as I made my way
to lay
my head upn her breats
suddenly a hand sent me
into a spin
and I could sin
no more

It's not easy being a spider
in love.

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I like this especially the ending, one or two suggestions and one correction. Try ( my head upon her breast ) and ( a hand suddenly landed me at heavens door) . Hope i've helped a little Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Thanks. And I will make suggested changes :)

joe

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Little Miss Muppet came by to say thank goodness to whoever killed that Arachnida creature as it was frightening La La Loved it..
Could we have an "S" in her "breat" then it will be more yummy lol
Take care young man, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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