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Confess

Confess, my love
I swear I was always right
I held in my arms, the one and only source of light
You will, you will; be what’s always wrong with me
And I will, I will; change what I can see

Confess, my heart
Was torn all apart
In your hands you held, my one and only love
You will, you will; be the end of me
And I will, I will; break internally

And when your sky comes crashing on you
Will you reach for me, or one of your loves?
And I said, “I can love no one, but you”
Believe me, I am true…

Confess, I am not quite
Ready to be dead
I was always outnumbered, questions rattle in my head
You will, you will; be my comfortable bed
And I will, I will; turn around instead

And when the sun bursts, will you welcome me?
Will it take your heart, to break from your pity
And I am so strong now, once I was so weak
I fell for ever, in love with you so speak…

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This sounds like something very personal, thougfh i like it i feel it could be stronger. Try removing or adding a word here or there, just experiment a little. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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