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Condemned Communion

Pornographic Papist genuflects and smiles
conspicuously lacking in remorse
for fondling young Altar boys he expertly beguiles
by Father, Son, and Holy Ghost of course

Baptismal Fount is full of blood, the Virgin Mother mourns
at seeing babies sacrificed for lust
childhood dreams impale upon a multitude of thorns
the iron Crucifix is leaking rust

a choir sings Hosannas while masking thoughts of sin
toward wafer eaters music won't refresh
all their hopes of Piety devoured from within
by existential hungers of the flesh

rapists claiming sanctuary cloaked in robes of black
censor swinging sycophants who prey
on seekers of redemption who unfortunately lack
the inner strength it takes to walk away

pagan Roman rituals disguised as Christian lore
proliferate the sanctum of the Church
every boy's a bastards son and every girl a whore
whose faith has sadly left them in the lurch

above the grasp of sanity, without the will to care,
wine drenched lips invoke a mass of hate
transcendental miscreants reciting evil prayer
to those who learn its purpose far too late

C. Lon R. Bruso

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Structured: Western
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A poem for those who don't think much of Christendom!
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Comments

I am not, never was, or ever will be a christian
that being said, I don't think much of it
the hypocrisy of priest and sexual abstinence is not WHY I dismiss it , but is disturbing to say the least
The whole kit and caboodle is built on nothing, over nada, and maintained by fear, and intimidation, tradition and gullibility

your poem is polemical, and strong in purpose
and well composed

Al

I take it you're not much of a fan of the Roman Catholic Church lol. Nor am I. And those priests who rape the young should be castrated. And the poem ain't bad either lol......stan

This is a no holds barred piece.
I enjoyed the first stanza very much, by the last I was getting a bit bored.
I think you have some very relevant points to make, but you have over made them.
If I were you, I'd edit and condense. Make those barbs more pointed and deadly.
Sometimes less is more.
Got excellent potential though.
Jx

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even whilst spewing hate at the source of hatred. ALL Ibrahamic religions: Christianity, Islam and Judaism spew the vlle pernicious lie that humanity is somehow flawed and needs saving, 'original sin'.
Without that filthy ideology we would probably all be starving from over-population because of all the wars and murders that would not have been committed.

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