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She stood there still
mind numb
No way to move her legs
nor, her arms
In her everlasting sorrow
she always knew
it would be her downfall
the day came

That she finally awoke
from her own thoughts
off the soft clouds
as she floats down softly
she can feel the ground
beneath her feet
once more
she is finally home.

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Why thank you Sir. You are always so kind. I actually edited this a lot, I wrote it on the bus yesterday. Those 1 hour rides sometimes turn out to be useful! X

Thank you...Teddy

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This is what feel. I want to feel at home. Love this please write more like it.

(Love hanging with my family of poets)

Well, I am so pleased this is your cup.of tea, I guess we can sympathize with her in many ways. Lovely to see you.

Thank you...Teddy

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Hello, Teddy,
Your title brought me in. I feel the struggle, the tension, and then the wonderful composure!
Thank you,

How lovely to see you, sometimes we have to remind ourselves that it will all be ok. Thank you for your kind words. X

Thank you...Teddy

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