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A common garden pest?

Submitted by shazbat on Tue, 2012-01-31 16:42

If elephants consume your plants
And devastate your lawn
Don’t run about or scream and shout
Just wait until they’ve gawn
For elephants are very large
And everybody knows
It really really hurts
Should they step upon your toes

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scribbler

Tue, 2012-01-31 21:00

Hi Shaz

Gawn? lol...You know gone would have rhymed too but not near as funny. Also it really really really hurts would sound better I think. Oh! and congrats on your book..........stan

weirdelf

Tue, 2012-01-31 22:27

of course you can just ignore

this impressive beast
until it sleeps
but then be woken wide in awe
by its stentorian snore

not up to your standard, but often your work just makes me want to join in,
love you man

cheers,
Jess
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infinite_dwarf

Tue, 2012-01-31 22:52

John

Maybe one can lure them out with promises of fresh peanuts? Wonders secretly how great elephant droppings would be for fertilizing the garden.... =)

Nordic cloud

Thu, 2012-02-02 03:27

Wait till they've GAWN

And do they go, once they've started coming?
They have tiny eyes, its a wonder they can even see our toes!

Oh to have an elephant in my garden, being not pestered by these gentle giants for me it would be an honour, but I do understand how annoying it could be, making fun of them is a way of getting back at them without really hurting them!

You Hephalump please be gawn,
you're making big holes in my lawn
my trees are now pruned
my flowers have swooned
oh Hephalump please you be gawn.

Ann.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

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A common garden pest?