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Coltrane at the Marina

The sailboats in the marina,
when the wind is just right,
sing music from their masts

The maestro, a two-masted beauty,
leads all the others in their song
A haunting tune, like free-form jazz

The accompanying boats
offer meandering solos,
beautiful in their creativity

When their musical flight is done
the soloists come back and join the others,
picking up the melody again

The avocets and sandpipers
stop their scurrying about to listen
Even the mischievous loons
take the time to hear the music

Appreciative of the interlude, they seem to know
the notes are coming from the breath of the wind
looking to speak with them, to show them
there is more to the breeze
than what they think they know

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Free verse
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A reminder to myself that we really never know as much about people as we often think we do. Also, I have no idea if loons are indeed mischievous, but with a name like that there must be something to it, LOL!
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You weave a colourful image with these poetic lines... reminds me of the year I spent living in Airlie Beach. I spent a lot of time on the cliff overlooking the marina.

Sharonlee Imageweaver

Thank you Sharonlee! Hard to beat a view by the water.


Michael Anthony

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Glad you liked this Mr. M! Assuming you are referring to Scott Joplin, but maybe Janis too? I'll take either, LOL! Thanks for the visit Dood!


Michael Anthony

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