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The Collector (Hunters' Series)

The number of bodies kept on piling
All of them mutilated, body parts missing.
The pressured Commissioner is fuming,
his family threatened and forced into hiding.

Sulong Fazwan's vacation cut short,
the team of hunters assembled again
to find the man who kills for sport
and throw his reign into the drain.

Grace reached out with her powers,
linking them to Chaz's ability.
They saw the face of the murderer
and learn the dark reality.

The Collector lived in luxury
and has loyal followers, trained to kill.
Its a bloody cult in the city
with the members carrying out his will.

He made a mistake when he rise
to turn a hunter into his prey.
He and his goons believed he's wise
to hunt down Irene Grey.

They ambushed her one fine night,
only to find they're in trouble
for her friends keep her in sight,
ready to move on the double.

The Collector managed to flee
but two of his goons are captured alive.
His pride felt as if stung by a bee
for it was the first time he was deprived.

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he got careless...everyone makes mistakes
all the greats did
ruthless or otherwise

goone..homies...crew....followers...
best too not flock off
alone
but have many eyes
then just those blind

Thank U!

for the visiy, the comment and the read.

Alid

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Digit was told of this Collector and smiled,
I received a post from him the other day
He said in it that he may be passing your way
There is an abundance of flesh to tempt his palate
Watch out for him young hunter of fiends
Gather your team and seek for the truth

Digit loved the streets and sights of Singapore
and said it was a pity he couldn't see more
But has suggested that it was on his mind
So make sure you look in front and behind.

Alid Good write here and the story should be all brought together as one with a series of chapters, Digit is on about chapter 12 or more..
Take care Alid, will talk later,
Yours Ian.

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I was stuck when trying to continue with the hunter series for awhile then this one come up. The Collector might appear again. He is like a cult master.Lets just lwave it at that for now.

Alid

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