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Colder, and a bit Older

When I was but a young man
I flew high, by the seat of my pants,
I celebrated with my glass held, high,
plus, I rarely missed a "dance"!

Then, as I grew older
seems I'd break before I'd bend;
and, as life grew much colder
I learned the value of a friend.

Now, I am much grayer
and cherish days, as they go by;
with each, and every memory
causing my heart, and soul to sigh;

I've honestly tried to help,
and treat others in a way;
to show that I'm an example
like how Jesus, used to say.

I sincerely hope I never
caused anyone to fall,
compared to my few burdens
my blessings outweigh them all!

And to our next generation
coming up into our view,
I pray your blessings too, will be greater
as I bid you all, "adieu"!

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Structured: Western
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Simply an odd amount of, "quasi-futuristic reflections".
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Join the club, know how you feel lol, at least you can bend a bit lol, liked this write a delicate show of age, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

...I sincerely appreciate your words of encouragement on this one. However, some may get the idea that I'm also, "hell bent", ya know?
friend, doc.

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