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Cold minus forty

Cold minus forty

If cold alone was to be an enemy
then what would we do
with those who really are?

scorpions as found on airplanes
where every ant is screened,
yet scorpions go clean
no blood
no X-ray can come in an arachnid’s way
but from Scorpios friends
do try to stay away
can you?
or else remember me some day
how Scorps can you way lay
but for your kind souls
I may still pray...

O Lord help all human minds
from going astray
the arachnid is designed to kill
its own existing path way,
it eats its own brain straight away,
the scientists say
There is no need of it now
Scorps say

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Snakes on Planes, spiders and scorps, and here's me going to fly to Spain in a week or so.
What you trying to do to me, not a bad write but a good write lol, one tiny glitch :- "do try to say away"
I was going to invite you around for "T" but you seemed to deem it sur-pur-flu-us, Take care young Bard,
Yours as always, Ian

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

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