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The clouds roll along

The clouds roll along
as I for you sing a song
the beauty lies is the scenes
we see

the night is young we see
we may stay awake all day all night
and kiss by the moonlight

be my light tonight
we will not sleep that's right

the vastness takes us far away
within my heart as ever
you do stay

the trees tall remind you of me
and the distant valleys
we both love to see

but tonight we will not sleep
let’s stay awake

make love to me
tonight we won't sleep
darling tonight we will forever meet
sleep… sleep not …and sleep

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ah, it's been a while, friend Loved, a gem.

Do not like the last line. Spoils the whole tone.

Perhaps something like
sleep… sleep not …and sleep

but tonight we won't sleep [delete this]

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corrected as suggested
Merry Christmas ,
if you believe in it


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