Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

CLOUD WATCHERS (Haiku)

Blue eyes blink open
across tattering gray sky
to watch storm depart

Style / type: 
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 

Comments

I've started enjoying writing them.

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

I'm hoping that someone realizes what the "blue eyes" are. Thanks for coming by...........stan

author comment

The picture was complete, in this grand write, I look forward to the storm departing lol,
Yours Ian

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

A short poem for a short term view lol..........stan

author comment

As the storm shatters?
Beautiful images of blue after the storm
Blue eyes peep?

I struggled between using winked or blinked and decided a wink carried too much of a closing connotation. Now PEEP is a different thing! I might need to "borrow" that for edit with your permission............stan

author comment

It is so lovely

This ones beautiful touching on the profound

Nothing to add its lovely as is

Love Jc xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Imagine that . An old grizzled bald headed guy like me even getting close to the profound lmao. Thanks for such kind comment.............stan

author comment
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.