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CLOSUER ONE YEAR

ONE YEAR GONE BY I BURIED” THIS TIME WITH ALL MY HOPES AND LIES IN THIS NEW YEAR IS THE STRENGTH OF TEARS LEFT BEHIND
THIS IS ONE YEAR” GONE BY AND MY CONSCIOUSNESS BLENDS WITH THE FEAR OF TIME IN THIS NEW YEAR WILL ALL MY HOPES BECOME THE SAME OLD LIES?
I WILL STAND BEFORE THESE HOPES AND LIES TO GIVE CLOSURE FOR MY OWN PEACE OF MIND
A NEW YEAR BEGINS UNDEFINED IS THE CHANCE FOR DREAMS, HOPES AND PRIDE I HAVE BALANCE THE SALTINESS OF YEARS BEHIND WITH THE SWEET TASTE OF ALL NEW LIES{ JUST BEING FUNNY } OR TO LOVE AND LIFE

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Dear mark i wrote this late at night on microsoft words I had it all spaced out in quatrains but when I copied and pasted it online the spacing change so thanks for your comment this is my first poem unlike Jess comment you added to me

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You know this all caps presentation is really not ok. So your caps lock got stuck? Any Word Processor will fix it, select all, Shift F3.
Da dum (and it still needs work, you know poetry is a craft, not stream of consciousness)-

One year gone by i buried” this time with all my hopes and lies in this new year is the strength of tears left behind
this is one year” gone by and my consciousness blends with the fear of time in this new year will all my hopes become the same old lies?
I will stand before these hopes and lies to give closure for my own peace of mind
a new year begins undefined is the chance for dreams, hopes and pride i have balance the saltiness of years behind with the sweet taste of all new lies{ just being funny } or to love and life

cheers,
Jess
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jess we have a history and once again your words are sharp I laugh at all the memories when you pointed out all the mistakes on my grammar especially on the chat line but you must have seen some potential in this poem in order for you to rewrite it that's good enough for me I might bend but I won't break

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I can work with that. [grins]

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

I see it sharper than mortal man should.
That's why I give you so much trouble.
You are a fine poet,
you just need to show it
by being kind on your readers and taking the trouble to hone your craft a bit.
You know I never bullshit in these matters.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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