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I've flown high
Touched my toe
In stillness

Algae grew

It glowed
Underneath the
finger toe
And it

It took from me

But now nail
Clippers are
my master
Take all
Clip clip

(E) clip (se)

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There is not much that I can contribute to this. Just wanted to let you know that it did stir the brain cells a little, trying to decided what, if anything I should say about this. I am going to assume; [ not always a good thing] that there is some story behind the last line. I get the reference to the e/clip/se, but is that it? ~ Geezer

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Thanks for commenting geezer...
My thoughts were a little blurry when I wrote this. There is a long story to the Eclipse. A long beautiful one...
The Eclipse has happened, is happening, and will be happening for a long time to come. I'm not sure if that's made any sense. But changes have happened for me. The bold first step has been taken. And it feels amazing...

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Like Geezer, I find it a little mysterious, but nonetheless intriguing - and original, language use from head to always. And eclipse is a great word, can be used n many contexts - and said in many ways.


Take care,


Chris Hall - Tasmania

Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.

Awesome just the right balance of symmetry in your words.Creatively done

Nice but you have done and will do better.

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