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CHRISTMAS SPIRIT SONG

* sung to the tune of " Deck the Hall With Boughs of Holly "

'Tis the season to be greedy
falalalala lalalala
Buy for yourself, to hell with the needy
falalalala lalalala
Don we now our tailored clothes
falalalala lalalala
While elevating well bred nose
falalalala lalalala

Fast away the Hummer passes
falalalala lalalala
heedless of the green house gasses
falalalala lalalala
give the store Santa the finger
falalalala lalalala
around collection plates don't linger
falalalala lalalala

The only Christmas goose you give
falalalala lalalala
is to the intern who's named Liv
falalalala lalalala
chase carrolers from your door
falalalala lalalala
busy with a rented whore
falalalala lalalala

Presents opened Christmas day
falalalala lalalala
all are for me by the way
falalalala lalalala
I thought by now you'd surely see
falalalala lalalala
Christmas is all about ME
Falalalala falalaLAAAAA

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just a little something I had on my empty mind lol................stan

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Sad but amusing a good write. "Christmas is about me"

always, cat

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Well, as a song writer I must not be too good as it was meant to be entirely funny. Always good to have your feed back.........scribbler

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Stan,

we have already discussed this via PM, but I thought i should comment here too.

I have already forgiven you for adding the "falalalala lalalala" in between the lines, which is normally put in when the writer can't actually think of words to use. That said, this is an alternative take on an old fashioned Christmas song...and is brilliant.

Sublime rhyme at Christmas time!

I felt the flow stumbled a little here:

give the store Santa the finger
around collection plates don't linger

...but I haven't an alternative you can use...yet!

All in all, great fun!

HS

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I'd had the first 2 lines for years and finally just decided to put the rest of it together. Always good to hear from you.......scribbler

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