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Christmas Quarreling !

I don't need a very, Brady Christmas...
and don't get me started, on that one about "ghosts"!

I want, my family's idiosynchracies,
not some family, for whom one boasts !

Growing up, there was our Uncle Johnny,
always irritated to the point, that he swore;

but, way before we arrived at our cousins,
we'd be arguing over, who gets the door !

What I'm sayin' is, it's only natural,
it's even documented, that reindeer can't hear;

so, Saint Nick simply had to yell orders,
and scream in "elfin", to make himself clear !

Promise me, each of you readers,
that, on your'll fuss over what each of you'll bring;

and help preserve, the true "magic" of Christmas,
by observing.....Christmas Quarrelling !

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Editing stage: 


I like the content, it is one that all can relate to.
Why all the comma's? And here again the rhythm
is jumpy which interferes with the music in the
language. I didn't see the need for the exclamation
marks or the ellipses in the end lines.

anyway, hoping you had a good Christmas,

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