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Cheating ("poem")

Carnival stars masked as streetlights
lead you to a dark green house
at the end of a street you’d never

dare go down, for no real reason,
of course. People have found here
reasons for living, reasons for dying,
And the cracked paint is patterned;
you just don’t know how.

Where is the line you came from?

The line that led here?
You can find no doorbell inside
You can find no anything
Only footsteps, a few heads
saturate in colors..And the man
that holds your letter just approaching.

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Love the images, the enjambment, the sort of cliffhanger ending, all of it.

One tiny suggestion for you to consider:

instead of "You can find no anything", why not smoother and more typical way of saying the same thing with "You can't find anything" or "You can find nothing"? Just a thought. If you keep it as is, it certainly doesn't detract from the poem by any means. It just makes your reader pay closer attention, which is always a good thing.

Take care,
Kels

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very much Kelsey--yes, that was actually a typo, the "nO" thing. I hope you've been well

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