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We thought of revolution
we dreamt of transformation
we thumb printed upheaval
suddenly here comes a knock-
on our heads unexpectedly.

they call it change though
it's chain is at the opposite
change you said begins with me,
what happens to you?
if all eyes can see the
same fact justice shall reign.

a change from positive to negative
from better to worse
from frying pan to fire
from one bedroom to homeless
from one plate of food to none
from motor circle to tracking
friendship to enemy
from laughing to crying
subsidy to scarcity.

the time for a good vision-
is now if we wish to,
the time of accomplishing mission-
is at hand it's a choice to make
think positively,
change positively
for a good change we all needs.

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and I'm sure my Aussie accent won't do it justice though I hope it gives you a feel of how it reads aloud.

There is clarity, hope and anger in this.
The final stanza though, I feel needs a more specific call to action.
"think positively,
change positively
for a good change we all need"
Sounds good but what really needs to change? The chains of ignorance, the enslavement by corporations, solidarity amongst the oppressed and more.

One line I didn't understand
"from motor circle to tracking"

Neopoet Directors

from motorcycle to tracking means,there people who has not better jobs their incomes are not much ,but the so call change has pull them backward and their are now facing hardship more than ever.

author comment

your sentiments pretty vividly expressed in this poem about "change" ...ironically it is perceived differently by different individuals to meet their selfish ends...and in the bargain the true change that's is expected to happen for better life is lost...your poem is true to fact and reason ..

raj (sublime_ocean)

but this is not a sentiments really, going through the history of Nigerian's democracy you will see the extreme hardship the people of this country are facing, and if you are a Humanitarian this story would have touched you life.

author comment

what positive individual or collective actions or policies could change the plight of your country?

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