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Cellar Door (Monster)

Can you hear it?
Beneath the floor,
Knocking on the cellar door?

It's big and hairy, and just a bit scary.
Not short or small,
Breathing right behind the wall.

At night I hear it down below.
Roars and moans
As it's sorrow grows.

So lonely it must be.
For it's all alone you see?
A monster has no friends.

A monster is simply forevermore
Beneath the floor,
And just beyond the cellar door.

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There is almost a child like innocence to it but it is well crafted.

Keith Logan
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I get the "child like" Comments on a lot of my poetry so I think maybe my inner poet is a child as well.

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We all have our own monsters don't we? I liked this poem but think it might be a bit more effective if you named the monster....just a thought that rattled out of empty head......stan

Thanks Stan. The name is what I'm struggling with.

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