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CATCH THE GOLDEN RING edit

CATCH THE GOLDEN RING

In a circle bound
like a merry-go-round
beginnings seek their end
never knowing when,
I catch the moments
and hold them fast
but soon the present
becomes the past
and the future comes
all too soon.

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"conceit" and "conceited", I presume. An elegant and deceptively deep one, Joe,
The emotion lies coolly in wait, like a trap for the unwary.
Fine work.

cheers,
Jess
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Thank you for that, Jess.

I hope you can catch the "golden ring"",

Joe

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I enjoyed this read it was of a circle sometimes we need another circle within to be able to step off and watch the other.
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I am dealing with too many circles at once,

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i feel the poem should be longer for more use of your greater creativity

and what of the golden ring that can be caught if not times elude

The golden ring is happiness. It eludes most of us,

thank you, and thank you for your compliment in first commentary. This poem is long for me, My poems are short and I make my metaphors engage your thoughts. There is much to decipher,

Joe

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I have missed reading you, this is a cracker and I cannot find fault

bravo darlin'

much love and hugs Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Good to hear from you, my Jayne and thanks

your Joe

author comment

a golden ring
we all dream
b'coz
happiness it can bring

loved

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