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Cat Tale

I’ll put in a good word for you
when I visit Bastet,
who resides in her kingdom
along the winding Nile
I’ll tell her all about you

I’m happy to do this for you
because I am fond of your fondness for me
And the belly rubs too, of course!

When I return, I can lift your spirits
if they are in the black corners;
pull them back from the darkness

The Goddess sends her regards,
and thanks you for looking after
the children of her feline empire

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words: 
Not sure if the title's play on words is too cutesy, but it felt right in this case.
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

What a lovely poem, Michael. I love cats, so you strike a warm feeling inside of me. I know about cats in Egypt, the Nile and so on, so it makes your work all the more attractive.
I think I understand your doubts with the title, it's a play on words. IMO, I think it's fine. All of the strophes are fine and so is the spacing. Hope you bring on more about cats. I have one cat, but have had many over the years.
Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

Thanks for visiting and sharing your thoughts Gracy! I only have dogs as pets now, which I love dearly, but some of the coolest critters I have known have been our feline friends.

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Michael Anthony

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Tho, am catless at this time.

Nice piece, this!

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Thanks as always Ray!

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Michael Anthony

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I found this a sort of a pleasure, Michael.
Later,
Mark

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If you take the time to read a poem then take the time to let the author know you were there. Study it and form an opinion as well, even if it means going back to it more than once. That is basic critique, what Neopoet is all about.

Appreciate your thoughts on this one Mark.

Cheers

Michael Anthony

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I always appreciate your thoughts on my work Teddy, thank you! More cat tales are coming, no doubt!

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Michael Anthony

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is the closeness of [fond] to [fondness for me]. Other than that, I think you have captured the love of cats by anyone who has ever owned one. [If one can be said to OWN a cat] LoL. ~ Geez.
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Thanks Geez. I hear you about the use of fond and fondness. I was really conflicted about this as I was trying for an additional play on words along with the title. Some seemed to like it, but I may revisit in a future edit. Appreciate your thoughts on this piece!

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Michael Anthony

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is the closeness of [fond] to [fondness for me]. Other than that, I think you have captured the love of cats by anyone who has ever owned one. [If one can be said to OWN a cat] LoL. ~ Geez.
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Comments and critique are vital to this site!
Even if you just say: I liked this story or your spelling
of a word is wrong, take the time to write a line or two
and comment. Your fellow poets will thank you!
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