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Cat Tale

I’ll put in a good word for you
when I visit Bastet,
who resides in her kingdom
along the winding Nile
I’ll tell her all about you

I’m happy to do this for you
because I am fond of your fondness for me
And the belly rubs too, of course!

When I return, I can lift your spirits
if they are in the black corners;
pull them back from the darkness

The Goddess sends her regards,
and thanks you for looking after
the children of her feline empire

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words: 
Not sure if the title's play on words is too cutesy, but it felt right in this case.
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

What a lovely poem, Michael. I love cats, so you strike a warm feeling inside of me. I know about cats in Egypt, the Nile and so on, so it makes your work all the more attractive.
I think I understand your doubts with the title, it's a play on words. IMO, I think it's fine. All of the strophes are fine and so is the spacing. Hope you bring on more about cats. I have one cat, but have had many over the years.
Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

Thanks for visiting and sharing your thoughts Gracy! I only have dogs as pets now, which I love dearly, but some of the coolest critters I have known have been our feline friends.

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Michael Anthony

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Tho, am catless at this time.

Nice piece, this!

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Thanks as always Ray!

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Michael Anthony

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I found this a sort of a pleasure, Michael.
Later,
Mark

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Please comment anywhere anytime.

Appreciate your thoughts on this one Mark.

Cheers

Michael Anthony

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You have captured the magic that a cat can bring, they are highly intelligent and I just love the way you show it. so beautifully written as usual. Your second stanza is my favourite.

Thank you...Teddy

I always appreciate your thoughts on my work Teddy, thank you! More cat tales are coming, no doubt!

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Michael Anthony

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is the closeness of [fond] to [fondness for me]. Other than that, I think you have captured the love of cats by anyone who has ever owned one. [If one can be said to OWN a cat] LoL. ~ Geez.
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Thanks Geez. I hear you about the use of fond and fondness. I was really conflicted about this as I was trying for an additional play on words along with the title. Some seemed to like it, but I may revisit in a future edit. Appreciate your thoughts on this piece!

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Michael Anthony

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is the closeness of [fond] to [fondness for me]. Other than that, I think you have captured the love of cats by anyone who has ever owned one. [If one can be said to OWN a cat] LoL. ~ Geez.
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Announcing the new chatroom! I will be hosting a chatroom on Saturday nights
from 8pm until 9pm [EST] this coming Saturday. Stop in and
shoot the breeze with the Geez. Our Chatroom is open 24/7
.

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