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Cassiopeia's Dream

APRIL (DREAM LOVER)

O my unrivaled lover,
You refuse to accept the tender love I give.
But deep in Cassiopeia’s dream lies my hope
A hope filled with desolation and thorns

A faintly hope Tex-ares had for Cassiopeia
Come to me now we are young
Show me the care of your love,
That cupid may smile on us.

The eons fleet's and flies
And we are getting no younger
Lost moments can never be regained
And we can never get younger than we are.

My April let’s elope to somewhere
That the world may search for us
For I can no longer stay a moment without you.
My dreams seems haunted for I can’t stay without you

Even in the deepest part of sheol
i cannot breath without your breath
come to me now we are young
That our youthful love may manifest
That our youthful love may manifest

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Comments

Dear Ubawuike,

I enjoyed your poem and its images. It's certainly a topic many people can relate to that has guided the poet and the artist for all of human history.

I do have one question though: who is Tex-ares?

Take care,
Kelsey

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