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cassette for missing script

Submitted by emeka ozurumba on Tue, 2014-04-08 12:56

aid cas x ? cassia
^ade lemon grass
Ass ET.
asset
comet hewn

cassette cars set
cross belt
cash earth
man homo not
sodomy sod do ........mi

choir hour
robin rob in
rubbing
raw being

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
the x in the poem is actually the missing script which is c,it should form the beginning of the second line where it means cascade. the inspiration of this poem came to me one day when i went to a stream, i saw some patterns to the water in which was amazing the spectrum of light penetrated the waters and made them speck and crossed , and beside me was a donkey[which is the ass] it was also drinking from the water, it was lovely then i also heard a red -breast robin singing musical notes like so do mi, then the coinage of the poem came
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

raj

Tue, 2014-04-08 13:06

Only after reading the "Last Few Words" the poem makes sense. I believe you have left too much for the imagination of the reader, unless I am the odd one out who could not connect without reading "Last Few Words"..Having said that, I do support innovation and experimentation but for me it was difficult to connect though I must say that recount of the events which inspired you is lovely..

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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