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Candle and Candlestick (Mature)

You awakened and looked at me till
your longing gaze stirred me from exhausted sleep.
Only short hours ago we shared passionate
embraces, and now again--we exchange
lovers’ inviting glances that can lead
to nothing less than another joust between
two equally determined friendly rivals vying
for superiority in our rumpled bed.
You win; my candle is extinguished—
Why did the creator endow man with a candle
that only burns for a limited time?
Oh, you wicked woman! yes, gloat!
But I am resilient and will spring back . . . .
Already you arch your back and catch my eye;
once again we reach perfect harmony.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words: 
Jerry is back. Lynda is stuck in the laundry room doing my dirty wash. Jerry
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Sir: I told Jerry not to post smut, but would he listen? No, never. Now I banished him from this site with my apologies to you and other readers. I have this power. LyndaK

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Dear Jerry, how come you posted this "smut" if Lynda banished you?! I think your poem is a fine piece and has the humor I expect from you. Too bad about nature endowing men with appendages that stop "springing up"...LOL.
You say you're resilient, don't know whether to believe you, Lynda would have to confirm it for me! All else is fine, the title, the theme, spacing, etc.
Enjoyed and had myself a laugh, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

He's a dead as a door nail, but I still need to watch the old codger, at least on this smutty site (Dead appendages springing back to life." That's just wishful thinking on his part, lol.) He said you have traveled through Arizona? Stop by the next time, but ye who enter here abandon all hope. Thank you, Gracy.
Lynda

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"smut" requires being crass and base. We Do have one poet on site that writes smut but you aren't him and this ain't smut. It is well done erotica in my opinion

I happen to be of the same mind regarding what might be called smut vs erotica. The latter has to be delivered in a tasteful manner lest it becomes offensive porn. Thank you for reading, Sir. Jerry

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