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BURNT ME ...ONE STANZA of my poem.

''I am that light(flame)
the only candle
which is lit(as in spark)
not by matches/(or gas burner used for cigarette )
but
by flames(heat) of those
who ignite(themselves)(Jealousy produces heat hence flame)
reading my
in-core delight ''

Note
I know the understanding of this single stanza
could cause confusion

(INTENTION)
'''I am a candle
burning bright
for those
who enjoy my light''

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 

Comments

Burning bright, my friend!

I don't know if one can be the light and the candle in the same time.

But i see clearly your idea. If you have candle and flame in different stanzas, maybe then it will be better?

I am a candle
burning bright
for those
who enjoys my light

i am a spark
of glaring flame
for those
who is in the dark

I am ignited
by their glance
on my poetic lines

IRiz

IRIZ
I missed you so 'muchlee' as you alone here read me solely
/(muchlee)
glad hopefully
u r back here poetically
How was your adventure with your book
Hope you have flashed it
Now I honour my stanza modified by ur
suggested one ur poetically intelligent
Glad u did not say
DOE SVIDANYA

author comment

chopped liver? ~ Gee.
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happy ur a liver
some one will relish
we all love liver in our meat
don't we Gee
Ritz you know
old Russian friend
poetically at neo only
ochen xhoroshaw devyushka
Gee is she

author comment

Hahaha.
Thank you, my loveliest!

IRiz

Iri good humour
'twas lovely

author comment

If I never saw anything by you I would be delighted by this work. It has fun literary devises that work into a modern poem.
Only the title is confusing and trite. The rest of the poem is sophisticated.
Makes us think. changes direction. leaves us knowing but wanting more.

All of us need to write as if the poem you are working on was going to be the only one chosen for an anthology, a poem which tells me I don't have to have ever read any of your work...this poem, now, is who you are and defines you. Think of any great poem or poet, it's the same. Each work has purpose, takes itself seriously. I think this one has that merit.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

......this poem, now, is who you are and defines you. Think of any great poem or poet, it's the same. Each work has purpose, takes itself seriously. I think this one has that merit.
Thank you Sir.
This poem was not seen by anyone till IRIZ arrived after 5 days.It is just a paragraph of a poem----- in disgust I titled it
BURN ME
How happy am I now you read it and so r'mks above please rgds
Eumolpus

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