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brutal fatality

Submitted by emeka ozurumba on Sat, 2014-03-01 07:58

a post date death
dearth dirt detriment
tenement blue noose
bow/tie umbilical
fetched are his siblings
seedlings symposium
trapezium drape museum

brute dawdling duck
of spiders webs
deities cranium water
blood life taken forms water
penguin of sanguine
horse hunch
two breast now
friends of foe
fiends frond for

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weirdelf

Sun, 2014-03-02 03:35

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totally meaninglessness, but lovely to read.

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emeka ozurumba

Mon, 2014-03-03 11:48

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tenement blue noose refer to the skies,being born and umbilical from mother to fetus, the siblings are those awaiting birth in the womb, drape museum means at the end of life we are in a drape not knowing of several mystics

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weirdelf

Mon, 2014-03-03 12:07

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and lack of insight, no disrespect intended.

cheers,
Jess
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