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Brown Eyes

At the edge of sumac, sassafras and pine
Shielded by the folio canopies you adore
you nestle barefoot atop the carpet of moss
A simple thing the sun had no part in
Just outside your sanctuaries rim; and the tips of your unfilled fingers
Sway a field of scented samples of all a woman is made of

I am there, among this splendor and all their pampered beauty
Buried but standing head to head with the perfection
As if you were a volcano; they offer themselves to you as a sacrifice
I won't tender such obscenities
I can promise there will be no obstacles to where I stand
In a crowd of beauty; I will stand out not pushed aside

Soothing your pain like a warm bath of liquid satin
Caressing your tired skin with a less than perfect touch.
Let the swirl of warm breezes turn you to the heart of this
haven you have hidden within
At the edge of sumac, sassafras and pine
see the brown eyes . . . I am there.

K. Mulroney

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Thank you for that. About time I find someone who knows what free verse is. Thanks for stopping by.

Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.

By: K. Mulroney

" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."

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And the tips of your unfilled fingers
sway a field of scented samples
of all a woman is made of
as if you were a Volcano;
they offer themselves to you
as a sacrifice
I won't tender such obscenities
in a crowd of beauty;
I will stand out
not pushed aside
soothing your pain like a warm bath of liquid stain
caressing your tired skin
with a less than perfect touch.
see the brown eyes
I am there.
it's me

Please pardon me
I have taken liberties
in extending such implied sexual beauty
such of a Libra gal
I composed a poem
BROWN HAIR BLUE EYES
SHE CHALLENGED me

Your poetry is explicit
I shall remove it
if you so wish it

NO! NO! Don't remove it. It is wonderful. I just hope you do not mind that I leave mine as is. Your rendition of this poem is awesome. Thank you for joining me in this write. I am humbled. Tipping my hat to you! great review.

Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.

By: K. Mulroney

" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."

author comment

Tipping my hat to you!

Do read three of my SILENCE POEMS

With you we walked that walk
Where the community of the marsh-world
Was perfect as the whisper of wind
Cool and soothing
Sweeping us across the daybreak
Or the first time I knew
That brown, red and yellows
Reflected the love
That was in your eyes
And mine
And running barefoot didn’t matter
Because you showed me the way
To the nature of
Free spirit
.
.
TY
.
.

~Mark~

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Very beautiful. Thank you!

Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.

By: K. Mulroney

" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."

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