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A Broken Heart / Imagery workshop (ex. 3)
The pitiful broken stone rolled down silently,
this same, once was a real rock.
Now he'd let some hot showers free,
to tell volumes of grief untold.
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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jane210660
Fri, 2017-06-30 07:15
I like
the imagery of a broken heart and the tears.
I wonder if grief might be a better word than grieves in the last line.
Jx
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Rula
Sat, 2017-07-01 11:57
Dear Jane
much appreciate your kind comment and the suggestion.
Thank you dear.
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scribbler
Fri, 2017-06-30 12:54
Hi Rula
Very good but I'm a bit put off by the quotation marks
Rula
Sat, 2017-07-01 12:03
Thank you boss
these were only to highlight the direct and the indirect imagery expressions.
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