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Broken Heart

A heart never broken
pristine and sterile
I pity their perfection
their memories futile

An unbroken heart
has not life experience
has not taken part
never suffered a grievance

A broken heart is a lesson
hard to learn but needed
its a beautiful blessing
hopefully not oft repeated

A broken heart gives us
strength and compassion
empathy a welcome plus
wearing it on my sleeve, fashion

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Comments

I must be getting jaded and old I just didn't like the theme
I can't see a broken heart as a beautiful blessing

The rhyme felt forced I can't offer anything constructive
Maybe rewrite with less forced rhyme

Hugs Jc x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

thanks jc for reading no problem have a great weekend x

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