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The broken bottle

The timid tenderness of her humble
hand hurriedly hushing all those invigorated voices
Freely fluttering
into fruition within
my thorn thriving
thickets of thought.
Leaving in their ashes
a single silken sigh of serenity.
Slowly swirling my soul into a sporadic star spangled spiral. Eternally turning towards that sumptuously soft spoken sentiment subtly seeping itself within the fumes of a faintly faded fantasy. But yet I still partially dwell in the worrisome realms of doubt. The doubt of many things that may seem highly insignificant to some people but to me it means everything.
I doubt that we would come to the end of this lifeline together, for I think that just like a glass bottle our relationship while in a moment of turmoil would in inevitable fall and smash into a thousand pieces leaving some of those shimmering shards of shame to permanently imbed themselves within our hearts . And as a result we would be too broken to come back into each other’s arms.

No one wants to be alone but the question still remains

How can you find comfort in a world where everything fades away ?

In this world the tragic truth is that all we have in the end is only ourselves
Only our hand to hold the other in comfort as we watch life’s timidly turning light slowly beginning it’s bitterly bashful burnout into the dimming depths of darkness .

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Dear Edward,
You have written many beautiful words before, but I am astonished with this piece. Your work is always inspiring and profound. The usage of the broken bottle defines a broken relationship, whether by choice or circumstance. The poem asks honorable, deep questions, and offers so much to think about. I am grateful for the gift of your writing, which somehow makes me feel that we are never truly alone.
Thank you,
L

My inspiration for this was when I was listening to the theme of the movie midnight cowboy
https://youtu.be/sOZYT8nX2X4
Because it shows us that in the end of the movie which brings me to my second inspiration also from midnight cowboy https://youtu.be/5zHVFXorF38
Leaving the main character once again alone left to the unknown world of the enigma.
Personally I think the only comfort a person has is themselves which the meaning of that is nothings last forever. Everything has to fade eventually but we can still comfort ourselves as well as others because there lying in the same predicament as us . That predicament being life . For the fact that your living means that there’s an end and you don’t want to lose people you’ve grown to love , but you do and the only way to get through the hardship and the losses is by comforting yourself and finally or partially move on.

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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that movie. Excellent, but really cuts to the core. Outstanding acting. It's been a very long time since I've watched it. I'll try to catch it again, soon.
L

Am astonished. I am very familiar with the theme from midnight cowboy as it is the closing track of one of my all time favorite albums “Angel Dust” by Faith No More. I have expressed before you are a master of alliteration. This is a perfect display. Wrap in the usual mystery.

Excellent job
Tim

I usually put myself in my writing like in this my thoughts on relationships and loneliness.
Where I came with the question .
How can you find comfort in a world where everything fades away ?
And just as quickly I found a probable solution and that we always have ourselves .
We can always hold our own hands and wipe away the tears and hush away the fears.

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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