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BRILLIANCE OF HUMAN ......neopoets edit .......

Can be discernible
from the quality of content
and the poetic intent
in the slightest use of cement
when the likes of you need
to vociferous comment

do not rant
this to you all I grant
my mind often runs at a slant
like an egg plant

but discern it you can't
as you have a mind
without a planned plant
so simply with me chant

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

section one, last line: I would change vociferously to: (vociferous)

*hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

mean that there are those that just go along with the crowd? Not understanding, but feeling like they have to say something, say what the rest are saying? I know a lot of people like that. That is just human nature, not wanting to feel left out, many times, people don't bother to take the time to question what they hear or want to spend the time learning about things. That's okay, we soon learn who those people are and what their motives are. As long as they are not being malicious, it doesn't bother me. You are an enigma; most don't understand what you say or take the time to decipher your ramblings. [Which I don't believe are ramblings at all]. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

It just came to my mind reading poems one too many why rant and now as you say ramble You have a polite way to tick me off in your inimitable way.... Say what you want to really say....my mind is saturated today.
What about vociferous you say?

author comment

As Cat pointed out, 'vociferously' here should be vociferous hence it is referring to a person which makes the adjective fitted in the line. Vociferously is the adverb!

Thanks!

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

to vociferously comment

or

to vociferous comment ???
or
to a vociferous comment ??
bit confusing

author comment

Is: to vociferous comment

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

Is: to vociferous comment

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

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