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BOY SOLDIERS’ GAME

Some boy soldiers in pastime played
On seeing a pregnant woman
Then argued amongst themselves
On sex and gender of fetus
Unborn Liberian in the womb

One said to the other, pointing
It is a boy in there, I bet
Another countered, it is a girl
The debate reached a crescendo
They resolved to check out crudely

Insanity drove the dispute
Diminutive diminuendo
A double edge machete in hand
Sliced up the belly in cold blood
Killing the woman right away

Aha! You see, they said jointly
On seeing the bloody dead twins
We are correct, female and male.
The fate of many is like this
In the continent, Africa

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It is just too much here where the value of human life is rubbished by greed and selfishness, Thanks and best wishes

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t. reflexion, Very good write. The feeling I got from this write is that sometimes people can do the worst of things, especially even to prove they are right about something.

Your comments are appreciated, meet a child soldier is worst than meeting an adult, best wishes

tr

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