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Boxed in...
Boxed in…
The glass ceiling cracked but I didn’t win a thing,
our productions late with all aspects that flattered.
The tea lady walks behind those b’s that sting,
direction was only given to those who mattered.
There I stood in a room full of middles,
jagged corners a noun but only just.
At the table a guardian angel fiddles,
with his crotch, zip covered in dust.
Weren't those tentacles to pick clean the horn,
sure wasn’t going to get blown anyway.
Silly man turns up, his hat made of thorn,
wondering if his new life starts here, today.
Don’t believe me then ask what you will,
remembering my answers are given in braille.
Sincere questions, or keep your tongues still,
with feeling or you’ll be sent off again to fail.
But what the hell, the world loves a trier,
I’ve heard those cocky lags exclaim.
Just as the prison van escort empire,
lose another one, to television’s odd game.
If the Kahuna’s bible speaks in volumes,
what kind voice do the people use or get.
They just walk about burning perfumes,
the revolutionary army hasn’t got here yet.
Speaking of which where do you stand,
those men are dying as you try to melt.
Is this the way you always had it planned,
safety in silence, afraid about what you felt.
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A night by tv...
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BlueDemon77
Mon, 2012-07-02 10:28
Powerful statement, impressive write
Hi Roscoe,
This is a pretty astounding polemic. I happen to agree with it also but what I want to talk about is the alacrity, the perfection of word choice, the pointed finger the poem dispatches toward the reader and the fact that you follow through until the last lash is complete. I loved this as much as anything I've seen on Neo yet. Great impressive write. To quote Johnny Lydon: "Anger is an energy, Anger is an energy."
Ron
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
Roscoe Lane
Tue, 2012-07-03 15:29
Thank you,
Thank you Ron , i'm glad you enjoyed it. I suppose i do get carried away when i start, especially if it's me having a go. I just sort of wish people would take more time to act about certain things. I'm as guilty as anybody else and then i get angry with myself, that's when i write. And i get a lot of my chest that way. Thanks again Regards Roscoe..
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
author commentIan.T
Mon, 2012-07-02 10:50
Roscoe
Well Ron must be very well read, this is a deep piece and from you it is a swerve to a deep understanding of things that go on as with the Kahuna,
This stanza:-
If the Kahuna’s bible speaks in volumes,
what kind voice do the people use or get.
They just walk about burning perfumes,
the revolutionary army hasn’t got here yet
The kahuna system gives us three units or measures of magic; first, the consciousness at work in any given operation; second, the force used; and third, the invisible substance through which the force operates—through which this electrical type of energy is conducted and brought into play.
We see the three spirits or selves in the composition of a man, each self having its own peculiar mental powers, and each using its own particular voltage of vital force.
If to this we add THREE INVISIBLE ASTRAL—ETHERIC—GHOST bodies, the picture will be fairly complete—at least as we are able to see it.
In Theosophy, as borrowed from the religionists of India, we have a strong resemblance to the kahuna idea of the three bodies which are made of invisible substance, and which serve each of man's three spirits as a ghostly body or vehicle presumably before the birth of the physical body, and after its death.
Yours after research, Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Roscoe Lane
Tue, 2012-07-03 15:38
I am,
I am a non believer Ian, and that's why i'm having a go at the Kahuna's bible. I believe man has been manipulated by priests and lords for centuries, frightened into submission by stories of great darkness and the like. Priests are just politicians by another name.but i thank you for your time and your information. Regards Roscoe..
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
author commentIan.T
Tue, 2012-07-03 17:48
Roscoe
I am a spiritualist with a wide view on many things, your beliefs are for you alone others can run with what ever there is that gives them comfort..
I shall be responsible for all the things that I have done said or thought.
Only I will answer to me then if my excuse is not good enough I shall stay at the level I am now.. Anyway not to worry things may or not be clear one day.
Don't call me if there is nothing after this life I shall not answer, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Roscoe Lane
Tue, 2012-07-03 18:08
Ok ,
Ok my friend, i've never liked it when the line goes dead. And hope your paying phone bills for a long time yet. Regards Roscoe...
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
author commentIan.T
Wed, 2012-07-04 03:07
Roscoe
My friends have told me that I have a lot of writing to do as yet, though my tasks are finished. so will not be leaving as yet, but who knows when anyway.
When the Teacher said that my tasks were finished, that space you get when the stomach goes into free fall just reared up , but then he added that I have more things to do for them,
Though it meant letting go of the children I spoke to, and that was a great loss, but he said they would still come and visit which they do, and that they had taught me enough, where I could write about things myself.
Am not sure of beliefs or anything but the knowledge I have learned from talking to the children was immense, it is how to put things into writing where people will read, is the thing.
But it is an individual thing, as all things for our Physical side have to end,
so where to from here ???? It's a pity that someone doesn't come back and tell us lol.
Go well my friend, I have three phones one in a Police box that makes a strange noise, the other is an old fashioned red thing at the end of the road, and a Mobile that may fry your brain what a choice lol, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..