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Bones Around Goop Drops

The stranger is hazy, not from this earth.
Phase me, banger, stomp on this dirt,
and the feeling in the moist earth,
thickly lit with tiny textured bits,
vibrating to the depths of bass,
making a statement, bold print,
dancing skeletons and the clock tower’s bent,
moving bustling crowds all around,
techno crowns and the time of our lives,
gooey vibes in a clear light,
through raindrops a red glow,
smokey breeze, green sticky bowl,
sticking pleasant particles on the low,
inhale slow as you smooth out the bones.
Above you appears positive rainbows,
one after the other,
making time for more bread and butter
with each other.

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Comments

I haven't seen your writing before , so my welcome to Neopoet and I hope you will join in lots of the workshops and general writes we have here..
A grand Rap, just have an edit and make into a poem of a form we know,
or give us room to breathe.
I don't think Rappers breathe.
Repetition of the word Earth and just the flow needs an edit, but I liked it.
Yours Ian T

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