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BLOSSOMS' BANE

Sunshine through new leaves
Far crow fussing at bored hawk
cut short by my sneeze

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Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
It had been too long since I wrote a Haiku
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I heard that sneeze and saw fluttering wings.

This one is a little bit of fun on the surface. But its a sneaky bugger. Implants images.

I love it.

Love always Sis.

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

"Sneaky" good huh". Well I should sneeze more lol........stan

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I've never read a poem that you've written ?that doesnt provide imagry. Sneaky *real good* lol

Hugs x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

To sneeze or not to sneeze, that is the question

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that was good! Trouble is, that one just ain't enough, like Lay's potato- chips. ~ Gee.
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Seems the less I write in a poem the better people like it.......hmmmm........

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my implication, that you should write less in your poems, only that you should write more Haiku. Maybe a string of them in one set?
~ Gee.
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poking fun at myself. Been a Long time since I did a haiku series.....maybe time to think up another one........

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