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Blood On The Snow (i'm back!)

“Blood on the Snow”
Remember
The lingering sorrow.
Gun blue eyes
Locked
On a moment
When time dared not breathe,
There
Just blossoming,
Love lies bleeding
Ever steady
Softly cocked,
I am felled.

*Love Lies Bleeding is also a flower also know as: Amaranths

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It is so good to see you back!!!
and you came back with a bang you haven't lost a step with your writing

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for the warm welcome! glad you enjoyed this poem, it is a reposted oldie!

*always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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Hello, I'm fairly new here, so I haven't read about you yet. Will peep at your profile in a while.
Lovely poem, so delicate and full of pretty imagery. I like short poems, as you'll find out, I tend to write long ones...
I hope you bring on more, so that I can learn brevity from you.
Best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

thank you for the kind words ;) I'm glad to meet you! I will certainly look for your work.

always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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delighted to see you back and read your poem in your own style....learnt about Amaranth flower as well...

be well..stay safe

raj (sublime_ocean)

thank you! I've missed you! do you remember my alter ego; eddy styx? I'm sure he is lurking around here somewhere!

*hugs, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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Yes I remember :)

stay safe...

raj (sublime_ocean)

what a beautifully elegant poem. almost like a photograph.

Thank you...Teddy

I greatly appreciate your kind words. thanks for reading my older poem.I thought it would be nice to reenter with this one!

thanks so much, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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