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BLOOD IS ALWAYS DIFFERENT IN SIBLINGS

No we are not bound
by the
''blood''
in our veins

for each human it’s different
again and again
various groups you all know

so an entity
7.5 billion we all remain
on this wondrous domain
you and your mom have
only DNA
partially
common
but more
memories of
a few mommy do remain
so from crying out to
mom
we must all abstain

ere in our eyes
memory of her alone
brings lots of rain
she is not going to weep for you
yes that our life's mission
now must remain

hi mom I will soon be coming
five years in waiting
don't cry for me
I am seemingly happy
just ate your leftover
turkey thanks giving

remember to me only
you gave your secret recipe
for that mom love from me

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Always a few words that stand out for me: "...ere in our eyes, memory of her alone brings lots of rain."
Thank you,
L

Lavender

author comment

Well what i like most about this is the fact you showed your gratitude for the sectret recipe for thanks giving, it must have not only been a time of joy when you were with your mom, but your appreciation for everything towards her great memories are so important. and carrying on the tradition it says a lot about loss in here.

Thank you...Teddy

Hi lovedly, what an amount of love and happy memories of your Mom. I'm sure she must be looking down on you with warmth. I like all your imagery. I think the title could be shorter. Not sure how to tweak it, but I definitely think it needs a shorter one.
As usual, my only nit is its prosiness, but I won't tire you again with all that. Just saying..
Enjoyed, best, Gracy

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