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Blissfull Sighs

The liquid passion in your eyes
sucks me into the vortex of desire
released from its nether depths
we neck in the bubbly aftermath
floating on its ripples like Swans
soaked in goose bumps
listening to our heart's hub dub
receding into blissful sighs

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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I am flattered by the sweetness of your nick for me :)....good to know this write caused flutters...

Me swimming in Champagne? ahhhhhhhhhh what a thought!! why not....let's tip the goblets LOL...

thank you for the read and your inspiring comment....

much love and smiles...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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never mind the double post....it can happen when one feels a wee bit tipsy....LOL...thank you for giving me smiles with your comment..

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Thank you for comparing this write with the Bubbly...if so..i must say i enjoyed uncorking it...

much love n smiles...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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beautiful write
'soaked in goose bumps
listening to our heart's hub dub
receding into blissful sighs'
- sigh

love judy
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

so good to see you again after a long gap...hope all is well....nice of you to visit this page and leave an expressive comment...

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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thank you for your appreciative comment....i dont know if this one neds a bit of tweaking u...

much love always...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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i too think so...in fact i havent edited it one bit ...posted it the way it poured out :)

much love

raj (sublime_ocean)

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thank you for the read and for leaving a very expressive comment...

much love...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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reciprocated passion, hot and steamy. I just slithered down into this relaxing and passionate poem.

Wonderful imagery Raj - thank you for sharing

Love Mand xxxx

thank you for stopping by and leaving a very expressive comment "slithering into the relaxing and passionate poem"..in fact that's exactly what i had in mind while writing this one ..to create a levitating relaxing blissful experience..looks like i have been able to achieve that..

much love...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Good thing you can't teleport or the world would be overflowing with little rajs lol. I found this to be very descriptive without falling into being Too descriptive. The only thing you might consider is changing to :into the vortex, but that's just an idea..............scribbler

thank you for your jovial comment which made me smile...good to know you did not find it too gross which i too didn't want it to be...your suggestion about changing to "into" the vortex is appropriate..i will get it done right away...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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.Bliss Eh!

You’re Bliss
Is as blissful
As was your kiss,
You shall never drown ever,
If in champagne you fish
And as I now learn
You also swim.
You can afford it
So have a free drink,
Ere you come out bloated
With champagne
And find something amiss
As you’re innumerable
Fish(es) kiss

I SHALL SEND THE KISS TOMORROW .TIRED SLEEPY TODAY

loved

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