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Blade, The Daywalker

The night is riddled with secrets unknown
and the bloodlust of the vampire's clan.
They found strength in the fear they've sown
in the hearts of many weak-willed men.

Do they believe I'll let them do as they please?
Never! I'll hunt them down and send them to hell!
My blade is the vengeance that won't cease,
I will destroy the places they choose to dwell!

I am Blade, the Daywalker
I am the hybrid avenger.
Be it mere pawns or a master,
I'll face them all without fear.

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I thought it kind of cliché that you used a comic book character as your protagonist.
It is will written, I just don't see this childhood comic hero is a poem. I have also watch all the Blade movies, which I love. I think you needed to go darker with this. Blade is a bad man and in reality has no use for the human race. he is not protecting the human race, he is avenging the fact that he is the monster he is, because of them. keep in mind that he is a vampire himself, lucky for his serum. if not he would be sucking blood also. I just think that in your poem you should highlight HIS inner struggle with is mortality as a human, and the vampire blood that courses through his veins. This is only an opinion, because I do know a lot about BLADE THE DAYWALKER!
Good job!
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I am the one that puts fear
into the monsters of the night
I am the hunter of the bogyman
when they see me, they take flight

There is no mercy in my heart
for I was turned without any choice
now there is only oblivion for them
no escape if they're with in my voice.

Eddie C.

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

I'm just practicing the soliquoy with this. Just fooling around. I thought Blade is half-human, half vampire, that's why the sunlight won't kill him and why he is called the Daywalker. I'll see what I can do later. Thanks for he visit, the read and the critique.

Alid

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