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Bitch of a Night

Finally back from where she disappears
during wee hours of each night;
she did return
but, has to learn
she doesn't treat me, right.

Cloaked in night's midnight shadows,
night's beauty rare calls to me;
she may be here
but, that is my fear!
She may never let me be.

Adding up just how I feel for her
this goddess of twilight time;
her actions do tell
of my personal hell,
what she's doing to me is a crime!

I was happy when she was around me
then, night's canopy would beckon her, out;
"Be back in a while"
she says with a smile,
then, I'm left all alone to just, pout!

My patience are my only allies,
however, they're wearing quite, thin.
The way that she flirts
repeatedly hurts,
I must've committed some sin!

I never had great expectations,
and I know that my feelings are real;
I never assume
there's not enough room!
I need closure to end how I feel.

Before things get any more clouded
dissmissing each, and every care,
my hands are clean
you know what I mean?
This relatioship isn't quite fair!

When alone, I will finally find, solace
in the fact that, it didn't last long;
she just wouldn't "play",
so suffice it, to say
she left words, but she left me no.....song.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words: 
Bye, Honeycomb.
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and rhythm was great! I liked this one, because I could relate to it. I suppose that there are many who can, but I remembered a girl in particular! Good work, ~ Gee

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Loved this full of bad memories, dealt with in humour. And as Gee has stated, good rhythm and Rhyme. Regards Roscoe.

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

...greatly appreciated.
doc.

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