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Bit by bit with passion

You first just cup my face
then draw me closer
as my heart beat does increase,
you wipe off my tears
and kiss
we hug more with grater force
as you then pull me closer
you press me all over
you want us to strip
bit by bit

we both do
our bodies’ burn within
you leave no distance
bit by bit
we strip

there is no breeze
the car does freeze
as you rip
and witnesses us drip
we hug more
ere the car moves along
the forest alone knows
we just made love together

you start all over
we strip
bit by bit
your thrusts hurt with pleasure
all is left to imagination for ever

when we are glued
bit by bit
we strip
we strip…..

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This is hilarious . I love comedy poetry - sometimes it's the only thing between despair and outrage. This made me smile and reminded me so much of they guy who made Young Frankenstein and Blazing Saddles. I loved it. Do you specialise in comedy . It seems quite a few do on this site .That's what i like about it , people don't take themselves too seriously. I may have to lighten up here myself too.

to see YouTubes
and against the nude back drop
I off the cuff compose
I haven't read you yet
do read my best


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Do you speak like this all the time? Broken and in rhyme? yes new .

Yeah I am challenged

what they say
half grown mind

and one more*
this is not yet coming to my mind
are you like me too?



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That is a really well crafted piece. The way that you approached this was exceptional

for ur kind thoughts
and the above guys
unwarranted retorts


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