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BIRD'S EYES VIEW

Submitted by Hon on Wed, 2023-03-01 11:55

I am a bird... I am a bird
with a magic wing
fly high in the sky
wherever I want to be

I am a bird... I am a bird
can move at a fast speed
jump and skip in a hurry

I am a bird…. I am a bird…
travel on the road witnessing the
changing of the season all over

I am a bird… I am a bird…
can escape and fleet far
away from a natural disaster

I am a bird… I am a bird…
chirping and dancing when
I am feeling exuberant
So, do you wish
You could be
like
me

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Contest: 
March 2023 Challenge BIRD’S EYE VIEW
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Lavender

Wed, 2023-03-01 21:33

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Hello, Hon,
I would love to be a bird and have a bird's eye view! Your third stanza reflecting on the season's changing would be one of the best benefits of all! I'm wondering about "travel on the road." I believe you are using the bird as a figure of speech, but that broke the flying illusion just a bit too much for me. Maybe something similar to "soaring above witnessing..."
Really like your final lines - and, yes! I do!
Thank you!
L

RoseBlack

Mon, 2023-03-13 18:37

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Such a beautiful poem about the free spirit of a Bird. Wouldn't we all love to have the freedom to just pick up and fly where our heart desires? Great job!

~RoseBlack~

Clentin

Tue, 2023-03-21 12:41

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Very nice poem. I enjoyed it. Gives me a sense of flight from all directions

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