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I always told you not to test the river with both feet
But like an erected penis without conscience
You took the battle to an army that has no camp.
They say If you go to sleep with an itching anus,
You are sure to wake up with smelly fingers.

Life is full of mystery,
Even the wisest have no code to unlock it.
Both good and bad, right and wrong
Are in place to make a balance.
There is a reason why
The child can play with its mother's breasts,
but not with the father's testicles.

But you took too much for granted
Until the day a mosquito landed on your scrotum.
That's how the neighborhood learned
That there are other ways of resolving an issue
Than resorting to violence.

Those who have not fallen for Delilah
claim to be Sampson on their feet.
For the turmoil that should have ended
With the earth scooped over on your corpse,
I do not blame you.
I blame it on peer pressure
And faulty parentage.

Since the day you were raped into existence
You only needed aid, not to get beheaded;
But the AIDs you got aided you to the ground.

When grandmother fell with her face to the ground
I swore that,
I will never lose another soul to burning stomach.

Ultimately, your toil was in vain
Like they say,
Birds of all kinds will end up landing.

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bunch of proverbs, mixed with some sage advice. I laughed aloud at the one "Until the day that a mosquito landed on your scrotum, then the village learned that there are other ways than violence to solve a problem". LoL I can hear that dolt now.
Funny, but real. ~ Geez.

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