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Big john

Big john…

I met a man called big john B,
he had a strange affect on me.
We were stood on the edge of
the Mississippi, near it’s end
a mile from the sea.

The affect he had was to free my thought,
to dream of things I thought I’d forgot
Taking me closer to that which I sought,
away from the fears and worries I’d fought.

Travelling we were from here to there,
never quite knowing the days end.
We took each new road without a care,
I’d never again find a closer friend.

Adventures with women, common place,
along with the odd pub fight.
Guaranteed the heart would race,
before we bedded for the night.

We’d do our fair share of work,
enough that we could both live.
If honest, it’s a burden we’d try to shirk,
but never asked for more than we’d give.

John could charm the birds from trees,
girls would sway under his gaze as well.
He said he only aimed to please,
yes, it was a very powerful spell.

Friends we were until the news,
friends yet if he’s still got breath.
This was a parting we didn’t choose,
but best I remember him not his death.

So big john B took the river trail,
I headed up north into the hills.
Sitting here older and more frail,
a tavern fire to ease my chills.

Thinking of the old devil kindles some guile,
I nod at the youngish lass behind the bar.
She returns my nod with a welcoming smile,
tonight big john, I don’t think I’ll travel far.

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You've said it quite well enough to keep my interest till the very last line.

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Thank you Rula for your comments. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Love Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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reminded me of Jimmy dean's Big Bad John song (1961). I had to go find it and listen on Youtube....I don't know why I thought to mention that.

your poem kept me interested, as Rula said, all the way.
You used the word "pub" ...is the narrator, John's friend, an Englishman?

nice work

Al

double post..anyone else having this problem?

Al

Sorry to have to tell you that "Big John" is now gone, he died saving his workmates in a mine.
I stood there at the old mine head (Now filled in) thinking here lies a real man.
There were fresh flowers left there with just
"Thank you " scrawled on the ticket, I could only know that it was one of those he saved or one of their Kin.
The site is kept by the families as a secret, they knew he didn't want a fuss and that the church may cash in on the act by making him a saint.
Your poem of having met him was great and a tribute to his memory,
Yours J Sparrow

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Thank you for this information, that's how he would have wanted it. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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