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Between Twins

Twin boys were born untimely to a maiden, "fair"
on an otherwise non-eventful day,
three moutths to feed gave her quite a scare
so she sent one son far, far away.

She sent one son to be adopted in France
Ahmal was the boy's first name,
with just the one son she'd have a better chance
although she loved them both, just the same.

Juan was frail and would eat much less
so, 'twas poverty that made up her mind,
of herlife and her offspring's, she'd made quite a mess
and her conscience did treat her unkind.

For her birthday Juan gave her
a portrait of him, as a gift,
but, her heartache concerning his brother
sent her lonely heart floating adrift.

She asked Ahmal for a sketch, or photo,
for forgiveness, and to please understand;
she needed forgiveness for making hm go
to a family in some far away land.

His reply, or his likeness never did appear
and she felt her request was quite small,
she smiled at Juan, and he dried her last tear,
for if you've seen've seen Ahmal.

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